ARTS: Your Haiku!

[Teiro]

Thank you, Kokuu!

I feel somewhat restricted with the 5-7-5 approach. But as far as I understand it, it is not the only way to write Haiku -especially not in English.

So here is an other try. It came to me during a morning walk and it probably doesn’t qualify as a Haiku

woodpecker pecking, cuckoo in the distance
dappled green sun light shades of blue
heart beats

Gassho
Teiro

Sat

[Gero]

Thank you, Kokuu!

I feel somewhat restricted with the 5-7-5 approach. But as far as I understand it, it is not the only way to write Haiku -especially not in English.

So here is an other try. It came to me during a morning walk and it probably doesn’t qualify as a Haiku

woodpecker pecking, cuckoo in the distance
dappled green sun light shades of blue
heart beats

Gassho
Teiro

Sat

Wow! I do not feel qualified to rate any haiku, but this one immediately spoke to me. So tranquil images yet really moving.

[Teiro]

Thank you, Gero, for your kind words.

Wow! I do not feel qualified to rate any haiku, but this one immediately spoke to me. So tranquil images yet really moving.

Gassho
Teiro
Sat

[Kokuu]

Hi Teiro!

Generally, when people write haiku in western languages they use less then 5-7-5 syllables since Japanese sound units are shorter than our syllables. We also try to use only two images in one poem, although there may be exceptions.

If you want to write longer poems, that is fine. You do not have to be restricted to haiku. In Japanese culture, you may want to look at tanka which take the form of five lines and 5-7-5-7-7 sound units. As for haiku, western languages tend to go with less.

You have some great images in your poem and could easily make two haiku! For example:

dappled green sun
a woodpecker pecking
heart beats

cuckoo
in the distance
light shades of blue


If you wish to see some German language haiku to see how things are done in what I am assuming is your native language, I would recommend the journal Chrysanthemum: http://www.chrysanthemum-haiku.net/d...ent-issue.html

Gassho
Kokuu
-sattoday-

[Teiro]

Thank you Kokuu for your good advice. I will check out Chrysanthemum. However, I actually feel much more comfortable writing in English - but I have absolutely no idea why that’s so.... It just is.

Gassho
Teiro

Who will sit tonight

[Tai Shi]

Morning news sweeps day
As I linger in my cave,
No gift above, nothing saved,

Day unfolds in blue
Sky with information done
In print black as rave,

I wander pages
With my hand so strong and weak
Morning news again is grave.

Tai Shi
sat/lah
Gassho
My poem

"June 13
Directly it is said that not a single thing exists, and yet we
see the entire universe nothing has ever been hidden."
ed. by Josh Bartok

[Getchi]

The dog barks,
possum hears it,
Home again.

One fat crow,
one dead branch
the chicks are due!!!



Gassho,
GEoff.
SAtToday
LaH.

[Heiso]

summer rain
indoor ants
waiting

[Shinshi]

Summer breeze rustling through trees
Song sparrow sings.
Never the same note twice

Gassho, Shinshi

SaT-LaH

[Onka]

This is my first attempt at a Haiku. It was inspired by an experience I had yesterday while sitting Zazen on the bank of our bottom dam amongst a Dry Eucalypt Forest.

Azure Kingfisher
Piercing water interrupts
Zazen is transformed


Gassho
Anna

Sat today

[Amelia]

Lovely, Anna

Gassho

Sat today, lah

[Rob H]

Sitting in zazen
Thoughts and feelings drift away
At one with Nature.

Gassho.
Rob.

ST

[Kotei]

pond and cloud and sky
dragonfly
fly, dragon - fly

Gassho
Kotei
sat

[Onka]

Attempt No.2

Wabi-sabi Self
Zazen practice diligence
Brings peace to the world


Gassho
Anna

Sat today

[krissydear]

first time as well. these are all lovely. here is my try:


evening zazen
sitting together, now
many will be (n)one




thank you for your time
gassho
krissy