ARTS: Your Haiku!

[Tai Shi]

Shokai, I finally get it, cataract surgery; I've had both eyes, ah breathtaking when I could see again.
Gassho
sat/lah
Tai Shi

[Tai Shi]

Two poems in issue 132 of hedgerow journal:


late summer
I play Coltrane
on repeat


too soon for another prophet morning blackbird


Gassho
Kokuu
-sattoday-

Thank you Kokuu for these Haiku.
Jazz, this is my least understood music. I listen to A Love Song Supreme by John Coltrane. Does a man have no right to pass up those passions? Yet, we do question. What if we just listen to the music?
Gassho
sat/lah

[Tai Shi]

The flip-flop is necessary. Pain is neither think nor feeling; it just is requires special treatment of both breaking dual realizations; thus level 10 pain well handled in body with MS medications, feeling is thinking, feeling is thinking, thinking is feeling. This is not the poem, this is the poem, light is dark, dark is light there is no distinction. Autumn the time of year, the protagnist cannot see the moon because his neck bones are locked in place, spine at 50 degrees. Body slumps to the left, sometimes the protagnist just falls over. How would you suggest person might not coplain while judging reality? I see your complaint, so please address constructive criticism while now you know the reality. I suggest lines one foot step before the other-- how many poets have used the same lines of this poem? Nice alterations--I like it. See 12 step recovery throughout literature, "one step before the other." Ha I like the humor, "Fancy a sandwich." Sandwich a fancy. This is real poetry.
This is literary criticism; is it not poetry. Allow Jundo, no harm done, just observations from one who knows. This was my job for 48 years. I worked longer than most members were, are alive "pitty," what's the harm, what is Autumn, Spring, Winter, and All? Spring and Fall. "Marget why are you grieving/ for golden groves unleaving...?" GM Hopkins. "It is Margret who you grieve for." "Thinking shrinks the world" turns duality on its head. "Each day in Autumn, Silver Moon I cannot bend my head" Do you think this merits a look" More the black night enshouds my "face."


Gassho

sat// lah

Tai Shi
Calm Poetry
I can breath.

This is definitely
No Haiku
No calm night

Gassho
sat/lah

[Jakuden]

melting snow
among decayed leaves
a crocus blossom

Gassho,
Jakuden
SatToday

[Seikan]

melting snow
among decayed leaves
a crocus blossom

Gassho,
Jakuden
SatToday

Lovely one Jakuden! And exactly the kind of image that we often need at this time of year.



Gassho,
Seikan

-stlah-


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[Jakuden]

Lovely one Jakuden! And exactly the kind of image that we often need at this time of year.



Gassho,
Seikan

-stlah-


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[Kokuu]

night rain
in a whisky glass
the windswept moor

pluie nocturne
dans un verre à whisky
la lande balayée par le vent


Gassho
Kokuu

[Seikan]

night rain
in a whisky glass
the windswept moor

So, so good Kokuu! Such a great sense of atmosphere.

Gassho,
Seikan

-stlah-

[Tai Shi]

Thunder, Storm rages.
Whisky glass tipped
To mouth in pain.

Gassho
sat/ lah
Tai Shi


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[Tai Shi]

Been there
Done that in tears
Tree swept away.
In fear I stand alone.

Gassho
sat/ lah
Tai Shi


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[Tai Shi]

Really good spring
She buys my food
At drive up restaurant.

Gassho
sat/ lah
Tai Shi


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[Tai Shi]

One of the kind in winter,
She revealed her nieces
Making water into
Farm where grow beautiful
Flowers.

Gassho
sat/ lah
Tai Shi


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[Heiso]

night rain
in a whisky glass
the windswept moor

pluie nocturne
dans un verre à whisky
la lande balayée par le vent


Gassho
Kokuu

I can taste the peat.

Gassho,

Heiso

StLah

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[Tai Shi]

Thank you for being Kokuu friend I never expected or experienced liked an oasis in my light. South Dakota is better for this light or American I thinks once more. Let’s me release myself in Zen minds beginning only now in spring.
Gassho
sat/ lah
Tai Shi


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[Tai Shi]

Hi Jakuden. Some years back as a pretentious early arrival at Treeleaf, thinking I was helping you into poetry. Thank you for teaching me over the years. I hope to live my name, Calm Poetry.
Gassho
sat/ lah
Tai Shi